Asharoken Basements

im 13, and im writing a book, i need to know if its worth finishing and then publishing… (:

When I finally reached the kitchen, I found the boys whispering something, I swiftly walked past them and proceeded to the fridge. The kitchen was exceptionally large, with an island, granite counter tops, which we installed ourselves. At the moment, everything was clean, but as soon as dinner came around, things were sure to get messy. I grabbed a quick snack and heading into the living room, I stopped in my tracks. The very familiar noise of laughter came from down below me, like a young girls laugh. It sounded cheerful, like who ever it was, could have been deeply at play. From the basement I heard the noise. I turned around, and slowly walked towards the basement door, that loomed a gloominess, and a heavy burden. Once I reached it and placed my cold hand on its knob, the laughter stopped. I twisted the hunk of brass, and the boys trotted into the room, but I was already stepping inside.
When my bare feet descended the wooden stare case, each step careful and quiet.. I heard the boys behind me, wondering what I was up to, I signaled them to be quiet and slow. I hit the bottom and looked into the room, it was a mess, clothes every where, the dresser drawers were opened, and their beds looked horrible. Jess stepped in front of me and into the dim room,i followed with Eli at my side. I wanted to say something, but I had to stick to the rules. I took a glance at the closet, running towards it I swung the white door open, no one. There wasn’t an explanation for what had happened, the youthful laughter and the un-tidy room didn’t make sense. I just put the image of someone coming in through the back basement door out of my head. I decided to check that door, it was bolted shut, and I don’t think even the police could get in it. I guess for the sake of today, I would break the silence,
“What happened in here?!” I said
“We cleaned this room, you even saw it when It was clean!” explained Eli
“have you been down here at all today?”
“No, we’ve been in the kitchen and Lilly has been in her room” said Jess.
So the room was clean when they left it, and magically when they come back its a pit. It doesn’t make any sense. The boys turned around and proceeded up stares, I decided I would sit down here and meditate on what happened. I sat in silence and waited time flew by it seemed, I sat on Jess’ bed and pretty soon I was fast asleep in the dark. Hours later I woke up, I was in such deep slumber I slept in one position, so I wasn’t a mess. I sat up, and tried to find the light, failing to I decided to just find the stares. I had totally forgotten about what happened earlier. It was raining outside, I could hear the petter patter of rain on the small and only window In the basement. I grouped the air, my hands landing on something smooth and silky, it felt like hair, but I wasn’t sure. I pat the soft hair, thinking it was my kitty, chewy. I moved my fingers down to the nose of what ever it was, then up a bit more to the eyes, they were closed. The skin was soft, and cool, The hair was long and silky, Moving a bit lower, I reached the lips, the mouth was open, an before I could comprehend what happened, the figure grabbed hold of my hands and bit my arm!

it is a horror book, im actually hoping it would be made into a movie some day.

Jess- my friend Austin
Elijah- My friend John
Lilly- my friend Maryssa
Emily- Me

its based on me and my friends and events that weve experianced!
gimme your opinion (:

thankies!
if you even try to copy my idea for this book, i will be extremely hurt. i have tried so many ideas of mine that have failed and i hope to purssue this book, please for the sake of my imagination please dont copy this story line? thank you
and might i add that the characters are already starting collage, and yes i have experianced some creepy things thati cant explain in my own house, so you should pay mor attention to reality….
and what i mean by based on me and some of my friends, is that i match my friends characteristics to the book characters, simple.